We had 10 minute slots in pairs to receive our feedback from Richard. When we handed in our drafts before first draft it was mainly to see our thoughts and where we were going with our essay. I had a finish draft to hand in.
Feedback i received:
My essay is a good first draft i have used the right structure and i have introduction and conclusion which is good I'm at a 2:2 stage and have some aims to work on.
- Work on conclusion
- Highlight points and refer back to the question make sure i answer it.
- Triangulate again possibly in conclusion
- Find books on consumerism and get extra quotes
- Make sure i back up my quotes
- Add more quotes to images.
- When discussing adverts add in other peoples quote to back up my point.
I am really pleased with my feedback I'm happy with my draft and will change my essay to get the highest grade i can.
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